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according to a recent study, the more time people use the internet, the less time they spend with real human beings. some people say that instead of seeing the internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities world-wide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interaction. How far do you agree with this opinion?

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On the one hand, without any doubt most of people feel that the Web has made a revolutionized change in our life.
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 and most important, it has provided a grate access to world transmission between people without any limitation as well as sex, distance and language. A case in point is that, most of people can join to the different social media and make a connection with other members in different part of the world.
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, it assists many businesses to have interaction with each other’s to swap documents, emails and create secure channels for exchange currencies in financial trades. It means, all of these facilities will get in a
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 for both sides of the cooperative principle.
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, communications software’s have a negative impact on human interactions.
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, people waste most of their time via social media while people with passion and enthusiasm using the Net.
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 approach has detrimental influences on an individual’s health and their lifestyle. It can be illustrated by an example; studies show individuals spent more time on the internet always suffer from obesity. Plus,
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 problem might be a cause of other diseases like diabetes and heart attack. Another threat is going to become popular with teenagers is that the lacking of face-to-face interaction, which leads to lonely personal life without having a partner and children.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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