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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possesions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that in modern life a great number of people consider that the wealth may consist of the customer's financial circumstances and their level in society. Ancient worth of the trustworthy and humbleness might be become superficial. I totally assert
this
 point of view and in the essay the relative examples will be outlined, before some ideas are drawn. I truly advocate that opinion of the value are changed completely than it used to. Because in today's world almost every people endeavour to receive high income, salary and benefit in order to improve their social stature which is thought the key factors of the up-to-date individuals' worth.
For example
, one of the most popular businessmen of the world that MC.Donald can easily deserve customer among a large number of heart, because of him a great amount of money and a high rate of situation.
As a result
, almost every person as I think a soul's worth can be measured by their a financial force.
On the other hand
,
although
 supports the kind of ideas which is a value based on finance would be sensible, it does not necessarily mean that all people think so. Since there are some who argue human's wealth may be not accounted via their social prominence or wealth.
For instance
, in India the intolerant, and kindness body will be admired much rather than the wealthy body. In that case
this
 type of ideas may not be always true. All things considered, I reaffirm that despite there are some the against considerations, in the developed living people consider that worth is high level degree of money and dignity.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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