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The graph shows how elderly people in the United States spent their time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows how elderly people in the United States spent their time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph makes an overview
how
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 pensioners in the United States spend
a
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their
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 spare time
throughout
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for
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30-year
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30 years
 from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed, that some of
this
 enjoyment went up substantially in
percents
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,
while
 others did not exceed
this
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these
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numbers
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. Now, turning to the details, the index in surfing the internet
is
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followed an upward trend from 5%
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period to 15% in
2000s
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the 2000s
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, but
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afterwards
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afterward
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 it was observed another increase to 50%
in
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at
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 the end of the period. The opposite pattern is true for the theatre, whose amount fell significantly from 50% to its minimum of 30% in
1990s
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the 1990s
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 and
this
 had an ongoing surge to 45% in
2010s
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the 2010s
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.
An another
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 situation can be attended for the reading. It was fluctuate considerably from 30% and
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 rise to 40%;
however
, it was a rapid full for over
than
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apply
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ten years, after that was quickly
grow
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, and by the end of the given period it was 60%.
Percent
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 of hiking was 20%,
then
 it was dramatically
rocket
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rocketed
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and
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apply
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throughout 80-year reaching a peak of 80%. As for watching tv,
number
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the number
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 remarkable climb to 70% in
2000s
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the 2000s
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 and
unexpected
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unexpectedly
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 fell
roughly
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to roughly
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 65%
for
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by
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 the end of the time
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