The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

The growth in pre-processed
food
has benefited individuals to maintain the pace of the hectic and contemporary way of
life
. In
this
essay, an attempt shall be made to outline the merits and demerits of
this
current situation and
also
verify if the benefits thereof are more than the shortfalls or
otherwise
.
To begin
with, lifestyle has changed to a maddening pace and
time
is what we lack.
Firstly
, The cooking
time
comes down considerably because of
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foods
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The stage of pre-preparations can be eliminated, saving a lot of
time
involved.
For example
, the noodles are fried in oil for a long
time
, we can prepare
this
with
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only boiling it in water.
Secondly
,
shelf
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life
of
the
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convenience
food
is always mentioned in the packaging and has a considerable
shelf
life
.
As the
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packaged
food
is usually packed in hygienic and sterile conditions with
definite
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shelf
life
.
For instance
, oats are packed in airtight packages with a
shelf
life
of more than 6 months.
Thirdly
, Tracking micronutrients
are
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easier when using processed foods.
Due to
various regulations of
food
inspection
authorities
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the micronutrients are displayed as part of the packaging. The backside of the packages contains a description of the ingredients used and a box stating the amount of carbohydrates, proteins, fats etc.
On the contrary
, over a period of
time
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people get various physical ailments. As the canned
food
uses preservatives which are not natural in some cases
this
causes physical illness. The high content of sodium, chemicals used for pre-processing
food
to increase
shelf
life
causes a lot of diseases like hypertension. There is a study which finds one cup of noodles contains more sodium than required for a person for the entire day. Causing bloating and water retention in him. Weighing the above advantages and disadvantages we see that it's more useful to use packaged
food
with not
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on it.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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