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Some people are happy to spend the whole of their life living in the same area. However, others prefer to live in many different areas over their life time. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

#people #life #area #areas #time
The
reprentation
a presentation to the mind in the form of an idea or image
representation
 of bar layout delineates the proportion of distinct
workholds
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work holds
 with various individuals durables in United Kingdom from 1996 to 2006.
Firstly
, 90% of ratio was used in telephone by customers. Whereas, within the
households
Accept comma addition
households, such
such
 as microwave, fridge and washing machine, these three were used by people to equal proportion, which was accounted as 70%.
However
, citizens of
Uk
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UK
 spent their
least
immediately past
last
 time to use mobile phone and internet connection, which was recorded
as
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at
 20% and 8% respectively in 1996. Probing
further
to
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into
 the year 2006.
In
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During
this
 year, the highest percentage of near 88% was witnessed as usage of
telephone
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the telephone
 by the
denizens
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denizens'
Denizens
.
Futher
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Further
Father
, individuals utilised the
homeholds
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home holds
 like microwave, fridge and washing machine by almost similar proportions, as measured as 80%, 78% and 77%.
Nevertheless
, mobile phone and internet connection were used by people by least ratio, as observed as 50% and 60% respectively. Overall, it is lucid that, in the both years,
british
of or relating to or characteristic of Great Britain or its people or culture
British
 citizens spend their most time while calling via telephone, but they utilised their
least
immediately past
last
 time to use mobile phone.
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