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After graduating from high school , some young people decide to start working right away instead of going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this?

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It is generally accepted that Individuals can decide their own career path after they graduate from high schools. It is a source of much to debate that whether it is mandatory to go to
university
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 or get a job
right
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 after graduation. There are both advantages and disadvantages about
this
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issues
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issue
. One of the drawbacks would be lack of
knowledge
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 of high level education or professional backgrounds. On the other side, It is beneficial for people who cannot afford the
university
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 tuition fees.
To begin
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 with, realistically, it is fact that it is hard to find
job
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jobs
 without
bachelor's degree
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a bachelor's degree
 in modern society due to
high level
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high levels
the high level
 of competitions. It is hard for high
school
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 graduates to compete with
large number
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a large number
the large number
 of
university
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 graduates when they look for jobs and of course, most of the middle class to big companies would hire someone who has more
knowledge
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 about their jobs in order to make profits.
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University
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The university
 provides expanded
knowledge
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 of the program to students to enable them to develop
profetional
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professional
professionally
knowledge
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.
Therefore
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, someone graduated from
university
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 has more
knowledge
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 compared to high
school
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 graduates.
This
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 is one of the most
realistical
in a realistic manner
realistically
realistic
disadvantage
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disadvantages
 of starting work
right
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 after high
school
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 graduation.
On the other hand
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,
large number
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large numbers
a large number
 of humans face financial difficulties of affording
universitiy
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
 tuition fees due to
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 high cost. Parents often struggle to pay their children's
university
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tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
 fees and they sometimes give up going to
university
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 and get a job
right
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 after
grauation
the successful completion of a program of study
graduation
 from high
school
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. Financial issues would be one of the biggest factor not going to
university
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.
However
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, humans can maintain their daily livings if they earn income by themselves. In
additon
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
 to
this
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, parents do not need to worry about paying expensive
university
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 tuition fees. It is arguable whether individuals go to
university
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 or work
right
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 after high schools. One of the disadvantage would be lack of expanding their
profesional
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professional
knowledge
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 and it is beneficial to someone really have to earn money for surviving by themselves. As for me, I feel that it
is personal decision
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is a personal decision
making problem
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making, problem
 about their own lives and career.

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