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Band 4

Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

Many
people
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 like to have their own vehicles like cars or motorbikes,
while
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 some individuals
use
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 other means for travelling purposes,
that are
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which
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 include
in
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apply
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public
transport
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, like
train
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trains
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,
bus
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buses
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 or
rikshaw
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rickshaws
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. There are many merits and
demertis
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demerits
 of using public
transport
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, and
i
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I
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 am describing
in
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them in
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further
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 paragraphs. As many
people
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 do not have
own
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their own
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 cars or other means of
transport
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,
so
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apply
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they have to
use
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 the travel
facility
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facilities
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that
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is
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are
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 common
for
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to
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 all
people
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 in society.
People
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 can have many benefits
of
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from
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 these locomotives.
Firstly
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, one can have reasonable
fair
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faith
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of
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in
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 these vehicles, as they can easily afford the cost of
tracelling
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travelling
.
Secondly
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,
people
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 can approach
to
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the stations, where a bus or train can pick
people
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, easily
and
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, and
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 sometimes they have these stations
nearby
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near
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 their home at walking distances.
Thirdly
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, it will provide a chance to become social. As quoted, when a person
continously
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continuously
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use
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uses
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 a
vehicle
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vehicle,
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then
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 it is
a possibilty
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possible
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 to have a friendship with particular
people
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, especially with those who are using
same
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the same
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 vehicle at
same
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the same
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 time, and to spend good time during
way
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the way
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 to work.
People
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 want to have their own fleet, which they can
use
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 for going to
work places
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workplaces
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 as these are comfortable and available to them all the time. On
contrary
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the contrary
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, there are many disadvantages of using
the
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apply
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public
transport
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, as these places are congested and unhygienic. Mostly
people
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 have to wait
even
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apply
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for hours, so that they can pick a bus and
can
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apply
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reach
to
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apply
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their destination. Sometimes drivers drive
irrationaly
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irrationally
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, that
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that
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which
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 can
resulted
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result
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into
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in
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 an accident.
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, during rainy seasons these
facilities
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 do not work properly, as mostly trains and
buse
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buses
comes
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come
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 late and can not follow
schedule
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the schedule
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. In conclusion,
people
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 are bestowed with many
transport
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facilities
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. These travelling moods are available to
people
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 to provide
facilities
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 to every
memeber
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member
 in society on equal levels,
although
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 there are some flaws
of
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in
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 these
facilities
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but
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, but
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can
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they can
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b
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be
 managed by making amendments.

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task
Make a clear view in the first line and keep it to the end.
task
Give a short reason for each idea and a real, simple example.
language
Fix spelling and word choice; use simple common words.
coherence
Use better links; do not mix many ideas in one sentence.
structure
Use small, short sentences; end with a simple conclusion.
content
The essay talks on a clear topic: public transport.
content
It shows some ideas that fit the task, like cost and reach.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • car
  • pros and cons
  • save money
  • save time
  • traffic
  • parking
  • pollution
  • delays
  • crowded
  • timetable
  • schedule
  • reliable
  • flexible
  • safety
  • comfort
  • convenient
  • green air
  • environment
  • city life
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