Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that taking part in a live performance like a drama, music concert or some sport events is more satisfying than staying at home and watching the same show on television. In my point of view, I partly agree with
this
issue. On the one hand, it would be more interesting when participating in a live concert.
To begin
with, the atmosphere in the stadium is really crowded and lively with a significant amount of shouting and singing from numerous of energetic people. In
this
atmosphere, everyone would feel relaxed after a hectic studying or working hour and more exciting due to there are a lot of people that have the same interest in live music.
For example
, the football match, Vietnamese people buy tickets to watch the live match a lot because they want to see their favourite football players in the real life which not on the television, so the audiences can
also
show their excitement and satisfied about the match.
On the other hand
, live performance does not have any convenient and condition that the television does.
Initially
, the audiences at the stadium are not able to watch the replay goals on the TV. Watching the replay will show viewers the situation that the professional footballer gains the point.
Moreover
, staying at home to watch is more convenient during the hot day and
also
cold day.
For instance
, in the hot day, the stadium will be an uncomfortable and crowded place for live performance so that if there is no air-conditional, the audiences will feel extremely tired due to sweat. To sum up,
although
the viewers would feel more and more exciting when they participate in live performances, in some situations
such
as temperature staying at home and watch those events would be a good choice.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersive experience
  • replicated
  • energy
  • atmosphere
  • sense of community
  • shared excitement
  • unforgettable
  • predictable
  • convenience
  • comfort
  • crowds
  • travel
  • multiple camera angles
  • close-ups
  • replays
  • enhancing
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