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The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1
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The chart illustrates the classification of
weight
 measurements of Charlestown during the years 1995 to 2015. The data are classified into
age
 groups of 20 to 29, 30 to 39, 50 to 59 and 60 to 69 and into
weight
range
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ranges
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such
 as underweight, ideal, overweight and obese.
Overall
, In 1995, the
population
 was healthy with all
age
 groups consisting of more than 50% of
people
 with an ideal
weight
. In 2015
however
, only
people
 within the
age
 group of 20 to 29 had an ideal
weight
. In 1995, more than 70% of the
population
 aged 20 to 29 were ideal.
This
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was
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reduced by 10
percent
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per cent
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 and 60% of the
people
of
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in
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 the
age
 group 30 to 39 had an ideal
weight
,
whereas
 the rest 40% was equally distributed between the overweight and underweight categories. The older
population
 consisted of the most underweight
people
 compared to the rest of the
age
 groups accounting for 40%. In 2015, three-quarters of the young
people
 are ideal, and about 60% of the older
population
 are overweight. There is a gradual decrease
of
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in
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people
 with an ideal
weight
 until the
age
 of 60
were
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where
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about 60% are obese, more than 20% are overweight and only 5% are ideal.
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