International sporting events could contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world. Do you agree/ disagree

Undeniably, global
activities events
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activities, events
such
as
olympics
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the Olympics
Olympics
, World Cup are which has considerably
rise
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risen
the international peace. I strongly favour
this
notion. The subsequent paragraphs will elucidate in details. There are
plethora
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a plethora
of merits to encourage international sporting events. Primarily, it helps in easing international conflicts. To exemplify
this
, it is evident that India and Pakistan
was
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were
two nations which had got a chance to resolve minor misunderstandings in Common Wealth Games tournament which was organized in 2009, New Delhi.
Ultimately
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Ultimately, such
such
sporting events act like a platform
to
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for
unit
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unified
unifying
people of different nations and enhance the spirit of nationalism and brotherhood.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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