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the chart below gives information about the groth of urban population in certain part of the world including the prediction of the further.

the chart below gives information about the groth of urban population in certain part of the world including the prediction of the further.
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Graph -: 7 The bar chart compares the increasing urban
population
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 in the different continents (
Africa
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,
Asia
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,
Latin
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America
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, and the
Caribbean
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) and the whole
world
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 in 1950,2000 and
further
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 anticipation for 2030.The unit is measured in percentage. Determining the detail of 1950
maximum
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 number of
people
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was
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urbanized in
Latin
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America
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 and the
Caribbean
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 was around 40%.
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,
Asia
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 and
Africa
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 had the same percentage (more than 10%) of living in cities.
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, exactly 30% public
were
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 residing all over the earth. In 2000,
Africa
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 and
Asia
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 almost doubled an increase in urban
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population
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populations
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 than 1950 which was equal to approximately 38%.
Latin
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America
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 and the
Caribbean
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 stood at 70% city
population
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. Whilst, around
a
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half number of
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population
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the population
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 urbanized in the whole
world
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. It is predicted that by 2030 most of the
population
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 (80%) of
people
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 will live in cities in
Latin
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America
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 and the
Caribbean
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.
however
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, 60%
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people
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of people
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 in the whole
world
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 are expected which will ass near
as
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apply
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Africa
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 and
an
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Asia
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 city
population
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 of these continents will be 51% and 57% respectively.
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, it is seen that the urban
population
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 has grown on all continents
therefore
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 it is expected that more than half of
people
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 will be residing in cities in the whole
world
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, africa, asia, latin, america, caribbean, world, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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