Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

It is said that there are more and more similar between countries because nowadays people can be the same products everywhere in the world
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In my point of view
that is
the sign of development and it is a positive sign
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First
of all
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in the ancient time
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people always craving for a
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fuller
full
life
so if everywhere look the same nowadays not a bad view
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Buying the same products
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having a similar
life
which mean most of people are having an equally
life
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Even though
every seem to be similar
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there are still differences between countries that you need to dig deeper to see it
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Because
the things that make all
nation
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nations
have
there
of them or themselves
their
own colours is not really about how they look like is about their mental
life
and the habitat
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What make
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is
the one and only is their
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traditions
tradition
and the habitat
life
style
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To illustrate that idea if you compare the
Asia
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Asian
culture with
Euroupe
the 2nd smallest continent (actually a vast peninsula of Eurasia); the British use 'Europe' to refer to all of the continent except the British Isles
Europe
culture you can see the distinction
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even though
they have the same manufactured articles
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saying that every
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country
have
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has
the same products is wrong
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there are many things that you can just
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obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction
buy
in
particular country
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a particular country
particular countries
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Moreover, if
they look the same
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the distinction between the original one and the imitated one are
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clear
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Finally
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because of the uncommon things
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tourism
are still developed
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is still developed
everyday
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every day
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In conclusion
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having the common things between nations is an
advantadge
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantage
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it proved that the world is developing but still not loss their own distinction
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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