Some people think that government is wasting money on the art and that money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do u agree or disagree?

Government is investing money on
field
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the field
of
art
and craft which is useless,
instead
expenses should me made on other working fields like science and technology. I disagree with the statement, as preserving
art
means to save the heritage of a particular nation and it can be the source of income. Governing bodies should support
this
department financially, as
art
of any domain represents the cultural background and depicts the creativity of people of that territory. So, in order to save the working of predecessors, great attention has to be paid over
this
field. In
this
way, it can be transmitted to
next generations
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the next generations
, and
infact
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in fact
a nation can be recognized globally.
Government
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The government
should build schools and galleries, where people can get familiar with
art
working
in
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with
their state and children can learn new skills in
this
department.
Although
in
this
materialistic world, people pay more attention towards technical skills and do not want to do creative work.
Furthermore
, campaigns and television programming can aid in developing awareness for
art
and craft.
On the other hand
,
this
sector not only useful in securing the
ancestors
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ancestors'
work, but can be a way to earn money and increase the economy of the state. As
illusttrated
clarify by giving an example of
illustrated
, when there are museums and
art
galleries for people in a region, there are
more chances of to
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more chances to
have
forigners
a person who comes from a foreign country; someone who does not owe allegiance to your country
foreigners
travel to that
regions
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region
. These places become admirable by residents as well as
for
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from
overseas. Today, people
seeks
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seek
to these places because they want to have new
expeiences
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experiences
in life and to get rid of
monotonus
tediously repetitious or lacking in variety
monotonous
daily routines.
Infact
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In fact
, these
place
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places
are not used for recreational purposes
only but
Accept comma addition
only, but
also
for educational trips. In conclusion, it is
mutual responsibilty
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the mutual responsibility
mutual responsibility
mutual responsibilities
of both governments and natives of a state
to pay
Suggestion
pay
attention to
art
subject by encouraging people to work in
this
area, so to restore the ancient efforts and to raise the income of a country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • promoting cultural diversity
  • stimulates economic growth
  • creative industries
  • revenue
  • economic competitiveness
  • quality of life
  • wellbeing
  • social cohesion
  • strategic investment
  • sustainable development
  • accountability
  • extravagant
  • resilience
  • public discourse
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