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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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Child
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 parenting
councelor
a member of a council
councillor
 has become a new job trend all around the
world providing
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world, providing
 new parents with consultation in
rasing
increasing in quantity or value
raising
 a
child
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. Due to which, some believe that good parenting attributes should be taught to
young generation
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the young generation
 during their school days. I personally believe that parenting qualities like respecting their children's opinion and accessing their needs are few of the important qualities which can be taught to pupils.
This
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 essay would discuss how these qualities help in being a good parent. Understanding other people's views is not only a good parenting
attribute but
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attributes, but
attributes but
also
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 reflects the mental level of the individual. People who tend not to listen to other's
opinon
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
opinions
 are considered to be narrow minded and orthodox.
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 it is necessary for the parent to discuss with their children over family dinners,
this
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 would not only help the parents, to make
imformed
having much knowledge or education
informed
 decisions regarding their
child
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's future, but will
also
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 help the
child
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 in sharing and expressing his views making him confident in society. The other important aspect of effective
child
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 raising is to be able to recognise the needs of the
child
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. Some children may not be able to express their needs,
may be
by chance
maybe
 because they themselves lack the ability to recognise the deficiencies. Parents, in
such
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 situations, should step up and help their
child
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 in overcoming the difficulties by identifying the hurdles, causing their
child
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 to fail, and provide solutions for the same.
For example
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, if a
child
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 is continuously failing in a particular subject, parents should jump in to evaluate the problem as
in
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to
 why the
child
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 is not able to understand and work for a solution. Parenting has always been an important aspect in any
individuals
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individual's
 life.
As a result
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, parenting qualities like understanding their
child
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's views and
indentifying
recognize as being; establish the identity of someone or something
identifying
 the needs are
few
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a few
 of the qualities that can be taught to the younger counterparts in schools.
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