MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

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The line graph shows the residence status of students coming to study in Australia from four different countries: Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore. It is evident that over the period, 1982 to 2000, there was a general upward trend in the numbers. The only country to have students studying in Australia in 1982 was Malaysia, at around 4,000 per year. After an initial increase, the numbers remained fairly steady, reaching approximately 10,000 in 1994. Indonesia, Hong Kong and Singapore followed a similar pattern

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stood at around 10,000 per year by the mid-1990s.

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showed a more rapid increase in arrivals, but

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was particularly prominent in Indonesia, which surpassed all the other countries to reach a peak of around 27,000 in 1998, before finishing the highest at 23,000 in 2000. Hong Kong and Malaysia followed the same pattern, fluctuating and finishing at 18,000,

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Singapore showed a continuous upward trend, reaching just below 20,000 in 2000.

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MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

Building underground transport systems (subways) is the best way to deal with traffic problems in cities.

as countries gave developed there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes why does this happen ? how does this affect society?

Some people think that people should choose their job based on income in order to provide security for their family. Do you think money is an important factor when choosing a job? What other factors should be considered?

Write about the following topic: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society? Give reasons for your answer.

“Prison is the only truly effective form of punishment, because it separates criminals from society.” To what extent do you support this view? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience.