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The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The figure provided reveals the data about the
number
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 of students in Australia coming from 4 countries
such
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 as Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and
Singapore
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 between the years 1982 and 2000.
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, it can be seen from the provided graph that the total
number
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 of residences rose over the given period with slight ups and downs apart from
Singapore
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's residences. One of the first things to note is that during the range of years between 1982 and 1994 Malaysia contains the most students residing in Australia, which
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 out at 7500 students,
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 Hong Kong, Indonesia and
Singapore
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 experienced an upward trend. From that time there was a dramatic growth in the
number
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 of Hong Kong and Indonesia during the
next
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4years
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4 years
 from 1000 to 1900 and 2600 relatively, before dropping down to 1400 and 2200 appropriately. With regards
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to Malasia
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Malasia
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Malaysia
 there was an increase in the
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 of residences and reached a peak in 1998 showing 1900, and
then
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this
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number
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 slumped to 1700 in 2000. As for
the
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apply
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Singapore
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,Singapore
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 the
number
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 of
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 country increased over the given period and reached a peak in 2000 by showing 1900

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, singapore with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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