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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Even in developed countries has a degree of poverty exists.
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, in many developing countries
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 is a major problem and the number of poor people continues to increase. There are various factors and they need to be addressed.
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 and foremost, there lack a means of livelihood.
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, if climate changes are not enough a sunny and clear blue in the sky, because most vegetables usually provide a different nutrient from the sun in order to grow properly, it would be less harvested their vegetables. In other word, it is connected to their income depending on crops.
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, it is crucial cause that a laziness and lack of an achievement motivation, especially in personality disorder could be led to be disadvantaged background. If people who have physical deformities
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 as deaf and blind or one-hand and leg, they will result in difficulty to find occupation as well as not meeting a qualification in order to work
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 the workplace. On top of that, it is, unfortunately, hard to overcome a poverty due to societal structure.
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, the modern society has a hierarchy like possession of the estate, sex and race. What’s more, a poverty usually gets passed to their children.
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, it may be challenging an overturning to escape from a situation.
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, if the pupil study at school in long terms, these issues are likely to improve better. For these reasons, learning many students to learn are the best way to obtain many opportunities that have a technology skill or scholar knowledges. All things considered, government must-have homework to deal with offering the kind of subsidization for poor people.
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