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Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favour.

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In
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 decade, the consumption of
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 has risen in popularity. People consider it to be the sign of richness, but it is no more than an evil sin. I, think abandoning it is necessary at places like work, hotels.
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 essay delve to explore both the aspects to
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 form an opinion. On one side, people abide by the concept of
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 ban as they are more concerned with the health of a
person
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 in the society. The reason for
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 is people are literate today, and they very well know the hazards posed, being a passive smoker. A
person
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, who is smoking might suffer from diseases like: Lung cancer; accumulation of tar in the lungs, oral problems like; gingivitis and halitosis; in the severe cases a
person
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 can get oral cancer too, which could ultimately lead to death, but these ill effects are not limited only to a smoker, a
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 sitting close to him can
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 be affected. To exemplify, restaurants are often crowded, so if one
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 smokes, he makes others
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, to inhale the same gases and
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 getting sick.
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, it is imperative to ban
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 in public places.
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, people say
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 should not be banned, as it is one of the sources of revenue of the nation. They say people are matured, they know their good and bad, the government need not to take
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 strict actions.
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, we live in a republic and an independent nation, where each individual has right to do what they love weather in public or private. After knowing the arguments and counter arguments, I am of the opinion that not only
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 poison like
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,
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 regarded as slow killer, should be banned, but people violating the law should
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 be punished. After all, smokers being culprit take thousands of lives with them. In conclusion,
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tobacco
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 could bring money to people, but it should not be forgotten that it has taken more lives.
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, considering the devastating effects of
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 weed on human health it is important to ban it.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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