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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

#protection #responsibility #politicians #individuals
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People have differing views with regard to the question of whether protecting the
environment
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 must be responsible of politicians or individuals. In my opinion, I think both governments and individuals have responsibility of environmental protection. It is true that there are many big environmental issues that only governments can solve.
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, serious problems about the
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 like global warming, violent storms, or prolonged droughts and so
on requires
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on, requiring
on requiring
 enough efforts and cooperations of governments and large companies and organizations.
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 is because solving these
problems needs
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problems, needs
 modern technological devices and a group of experienced scientists.
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 means that only governments are able to investing funds and resources to deal with these serious issues.
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, politicians will set out laws and regulations which force individuals to follow.
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, I believe that individuals can contribute to protect the
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 by various ways
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 they
do
engage in
make
 little effort. Since nowadays the technology is in progress and develop,
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 pollution is being aware of citizens;
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; every individual should take actions to protect the
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.
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, we should learn the three R's of the
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: reduce, reuse, recycle or join hands in activities like planting more trees, recycling plastic bottle, using bicycles
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 of cars and so on. I think that with small actions and the power of our consensus, the efforts that we made will be enormous over time. The
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 can be tackled effectively if there is cooperation between the government and individuals In conclusion, on the whole, based on the reasons above, I believe that protecting the
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 is not only the responsibility of governments but
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 the obligation of individuals.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental protection
  • responsibility
  • politicians
  • individuals
  • large-scale
  • policies
  • regulations
  • impact
  • corporations
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • resources
  • expertise
  • collective efforts
  • difference
  • combination
  • crucial
  • effective
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