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Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

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In
this
 epoch, all the users are dealing with the rising multitude of adverts from the opposing organizations. I personally think, to a large extent, they persuade their customers through adverts.
However
, the authority should be taken some precautions, which spread awareness in the public and strong their belief on the standard of the product.
To begin
 with, many commercial display different products through well reputed persons because they know that advertisement is the best strategy to increase their sales as well as to aware the people about their products.
Furthermore
, they illustrate the benefits of their items and shows a various range, which is based on the different prices.
For instance
, nowadays, an advert is playing on the television,
that is
 related to the importance of a calcium for bones.
This
 has dramatically increased the sales and it creates a huge impact on the public.
Therefore
, advertisement is the best approach to persuade people.
On the other hand
, some schools of thoughts, feel the need of steps, those protect the mankind from the tracks of advertising Industries. They most of the time play with the thinking of a young generation to sell their products and
then
, the offsprings compel their guardians to buy that thing for them, which is not supposed to be a great strategy. They should
also
 prohibit the Adverts of cigarettes because they affect the humans or they should publish a warning sign vividly on its packet. There is
also
 entail to make a legislation against those groups, whose are selling low quality food and playing with the life of humans.
For example
, a recent survey, revealed that an advertising agency has shown the nutrient list that a junk food contains, which was not true. As a repercussion, community of that area faces serious circumstances pertaining to their health. So, there is a requirement of standard quality control check in order to avoid
this
 again. To conclude, advertisement plays an imperative role to raise the market of any item, which sellers face it many times from different companies, but there should be an enforcement of the law to protect consumers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advertising campaign
  • celebrity endorsement
  • psychological manipulation
  • emotional appeal
  • targeted advertisement
  • digital marketing
  • social proof
  • peer review
  • consumer trust
  • brand loyalty
  • misleading advertisement
  • government regulation
  • consumer protection
  • media literacy
  • ad-blocker
  • privacy settings
  • informed choice
  • critical thinking
  • marketing tactics
  • consumer awareness
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