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Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and import food as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Introduction
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food
Suggestion
Food
 is
very important part
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a very important part
 of
live
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living
 life and the producing
food
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 for all
population
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populations
 is always a hot topic.
while
Suggestion
While
 some people argue that all
kind
Suggestion
kinds
 of
food
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 produce by ourselves and less to
import
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food
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by
Suggestion
from
 other countries.
Linking Words
however
Suggestion
However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 cannot
compleletly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 agree with the statement.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
Linking Words
,
plants
Suggestion
plant
plant's
groth
(biology) the process of an individual organism growing organically; a purely biological unfolding of events involved in an organism changing gradually from a simple to a more complex level
growth
Groth
growths
 are
deped
the extent downward or backward or inward
depth
depend
 of may things:
wheather
the atmospheric conditions that comprise the state of the atmosphere in terms of temperature and wind and clouds and precipitation
weather
,
Accept space
,
water
,
Accept space
,
land.
and
Suggestion
And
inthis
Suggestion
in this
 world have a various type of atmosphere and land
thatswhy
Suggestion
 some countries have a cold atmosphere ad some have a dry
.
Accept space
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 they are not able to produce all
kinf
Suggestion
kinds
kind
 of
food
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.
these
Suggestion
These
 will be
explanied
make plain and comprehensible
explained
 by example
,
Accept space
,
canada
a nation in northern North America; the French were the first Europeans to settle in mainland Canada
Canada
 have a
terraibel
exceptionally bad or displeasing
terrible
 cold
condtion
a state at a particular time
condition
conditions
 they
can ot produce
Suggestion
can produce
can to produce
 various
type
Suggestion
types
 of
food
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.
Accept space
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 they need to
import
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food
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by
Suggestion
from
 other countries
.
Accept space
.
Body paragraph 2
o
Suggestion
O
 a
secod
coming next after the first in position in space or time or degree or magnitude
second
 part, if countries stopped the
import
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-export
food
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 is
damage
Suggestion
damaging
globale economy
Suggestion
the global economy
global economy
.
,
Accept space
,
if
,
Accept space
,
when
country
Suggestion
a country
the country
 is not
connect
Suggestion
connected
 with other
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
cultures
cities
 in the world
its
it is
it's
 become isolated.
Linking Words
for
Suggestion
For
 example
,
Accept space
,
in the world war time all countries
lockdown
Suggestion
lock down
 their places.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, no one can
import
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 and export
theire
of them or themselves
their
their e
there
food
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 and good.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
this
Linking Words
 situation was
became
Suggestion
becoming
 a part of the
decrassed
facing or experiencing financial trouble or difficulty
distressed
depressed
deceased
 economy
groth
(biology) the process of an individual organism growing organically; a purely biological unfolding of events involved in an organism changing gradually from a simple to a more complex level
growth
grows
great
.
Conclusion
to
Suggestion
To
 conclude, while some people think that their countries to produce all
food
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 for them and not need to
import
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 the
food
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.
Accept space
.
hoewere
Suggestion
However
Hoe were
Hoewere
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 disagree with
this
Linking Words
 view
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
this
Linking Words
 will have some drawback and disadvantage.

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