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Most people are worried about young children playing video games, what problems might these games cause as a whole to society and individuals? What solutions can you suggest to reduce these problems.

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As we live in over-qualified technology world, there is a great weariness among people that there is a major threat for young people and adults in terms of playing broadcast games. Ubnormaln
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 brains and becoming invisible from the real world can be the most serious challenges which society and individuals may suffer and but there some straight forward solutions to alleviate their negative effects. There is strong evidence to suggest that gameaholi
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based on only from an unrealistic world which they are accustomed to see and be with. Later it can cause some problems with the relationship between their parents or even worse, they cannot adapt to the difficulties of their life in the future. To handle
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 explain that playing and fluttering away their day by with unnecessary games have no good point. Or they should make them busy by some kinds of sport activities or several subjects. According to
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 opinion gamers will not be able to manage for games, indeed parents can organize their moment and give some extra point for relaxing by program games, but only under the adult supervision of their children. These methods so efficiently would provide their children with maintenance day, which is the most required thing in our country. To sum up, there is no doubt that young children might be able to suffer from ignorance of dealing with the problems of real life, when getting exposed to broadcast games more often than they may be.
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, possible solutions could be restricting their playing moment.

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