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The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories

The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories
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The chart gives data on the number of
hours
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 that General
Motors
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, Ford, Toyota and Honda spent manufacturing vehicles in the USA from 1998 to 2005.
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,
this
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 country saw fluctuating decreases in the average
time
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 spent by four different brands during the period.
In addition
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, General
Motors
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 tended to reduce their
time
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 on producing vehicles the most. In the year 1998, around 32
hours
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 per vehicle was the
time
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 that General
Motors
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 spent, compared to around 28
hours
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, which was the figure for Ford.
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, the average
time
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 to produce a car in the USA by both Toyota and Honda
were
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 much lower and nearly the same, at about 22
hours
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 per vehicle. During the period between 1998 and 2005, there was
dramatic
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 drop
by
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 10
hours
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 spent in the figure for General
Motors
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 to around 22
hours
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.
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, Ford tended to spend less
time
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 on manufacturing cars, which declined from approximately 28
hours
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 to about 21
hours
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. The figures for both Toyota and Honda remained relatively constant, standing at about 20
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, motors, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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