Many countries spend a lot of money on improved transport for urban areas while neglecting rural transport. What are the problems associated with this? What are some possible solutions according to you?
The modern world tend to develop at a hectic pace, and
while
some areas
of development get extra attention and are perfectly covered, others seem to be neglected.
It's paramount to have well developed urban transport. Many countries, including even the USA, can't offer a vast range of well developed urban transport. As far as I know, the very few cities where you can make do without a car
of your own are New York, Chicago, and probably Los Angeles. Now imagine living without a car
somewhere in a faw away city in Wyoming. It is simply next to impossible: all the vital facilities will be simply out of reach.
Thus
, it leads us to a very important point: people
living in rural areas
must absolutely have a driver's licence and know how to drive. sounds simple, but in facts it's not. Personally, I don't have a driver's licence and I'm terribly scared to drive due to
an accident I've had while
I was in a car
with someone else. So, there might be several ways to tackle this
issue.
First off, the authorities may create more affordable taxi with a greater coverage. Let's call is "social taxi". This
way, people
can have a car
when they need to go somewhere or even pre-book a car
right to their doorstep.
Second,
the authorities may create a comprehensible map with a true-to-life schedule of public transport. In Russia where I live, it's prohibited to build new houses if there's not a bus stop 500 meters within reach. so, having more buses could also
help.
Lastly
, if people
living in the rural areas
want to have but can't afford a car
, the authorities may consider introducing special loans for this
category of citizens. For example
, they may have a lower interest and/or down payment. It's not fair to give such
a loan to someone in New York as they have subway, but people
in rural areas
may be badly in need of them.
By and large, despite the sutiation being seemingly hard to solve, in reality, it's very possible to find smart solutions and make lives of those who live in the countryside better, easier and more comfortable.Submitted by aboykova13 on
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Your essay addresses the prompt effectively by discussing both the problems and possible solutions related to rural transport.
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You have concluded your essay on a positive note by emphasizing the possibility of finding solutions to improve rural transport.
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