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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, In a modern phase of life, it's a trend to eat
junk
food
instead
 of healthy
food
.
As a result
, Many countries, people who are suffering from
health
 issues has been growing rapidly. To protect people it is obvious for The Government to put a heavy tax on fast
food
. I disagree with
this
 phenomenon.
To begin
 with, It is true that a plethora of people who are addicted to the
junk
food
 and street cuisines.The Government should impose a higher taxes because
health
 issues are growing higher as the day passed. Specially youngsters have a bad habit to eat these kind of
food
. To put a higher tax on
junk
food
 many people are stop consuming these types of
food
 because numerous people who cannot afford the high prices of
food
 and
as a result
 they have to stop eating fast
food
.
Also
, A ratio of people who are suffering from
health
 issues has been significantly slow down. It is one of the noticeable solution to stop people to eat a
junk
food
.
However
, I believe that it is not necessary for The Government to put a heavy tax on fast
food
 because it's not a perfect solution to decreasing a people who are suffering from
health
 issues. All the age group of people who likes to eat a fast
food
 and not all the time
junk
food
 is an issue to
health
 problem. Specially Youngsters and children are loved too much to eat these kind of
food
 and they are enjoying it. The Government should think once time for people when they impose higher taxes on
food
 because poor human are life are depends on the type of
food
.
Moreover
, if The Government puts high taxes on
food
 than all the people are not stopping to eat
food
 and they are eat as much as they can. In these Global World everyone is addicted to
junk
food
. Let's take an example, if a girl wants to eat
junk
food
 and her parents are not able to purchase these kind of
food
 due to higher taxes on it. At the end a girl insists her parents to take
food
 and they take a
food
 anyhow for their daughter. The Government held the seminar depend on
health
 and
junk
food
 and how
junk
food
 is bad for
health
.
Also it
Accept comma addition
Also, it
 is human Onus taking care of their
health
 and stop to eat
junk
food
. In the conclusion, from all aforementioned points, I hold my view that it is not a perfect solution to stop people to eating a
junk
food
. The Government Should try some better ideas to keeping in mind that people are addicted to the
junk
food
.
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