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Modern technology, such as personal computers and the Internet, have make it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead of going to an office every day. What are some of the advantage and disadvantages of this situation?

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With the advent of technology, video chats, conference calls and wireless internet are available that makes the location of the employee is no longer as important as before. For now, more and more corporations allow employees
work
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to work
 remotely and it becomes a norm. In
this
 essay, I will examine the benefits and drawbacks of
work
 outside of an
office
In
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At
 prospective of
employee
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employment
,
work
 remotely offers them more flexible lifestyle, save travelling time and cost.
This
 is especially true when working parents need to
work
 and manage household chores. They can better manage their time
for example
, getting up earlier in the morning to cope with the tasks before cooking breakfast for their kids. Meanwhile, corporations could pay less for the
office
 space, equipments and supplies.
Moreover
, employers could be benefit from improving staff loyalty and retention. If employers allow their employees to
work
 remotely, it can help reduce stress and help them produce quality
work
.
Nevertheless
, employers are facing difficulties in monitoring performance and maintain information security.
Although
 internet security is not a new issue, employees may overlook the threads,
such
 as connecting to unsecured wifi and transmitting sensitive information between personal and company laptops, that will eventually have a huge impact on the business. Even though the measuring system could be applied to monitor staff
work
 progress, employers are relying on employees’ self-discipline to motivate themselves to
work
 efficiently. In conclusion, in spite of the downsides of
work
 remotely, employers should devote more resource of investigating the possibility of letting
employee
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an employee work
work
 in different locations rather that in a traditional
office
. The recent disease outbreak, CONID- 19, affecting business operation, many companies have to close their
office
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offices
 temperately in order to minimize virus transmission. If they are equipped to
work
 at different places, they can maintain their business at a certain level.

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