Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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People’s physical strength deteriorates with aging.

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, one school of thought avers that, it not wises to fix the retirement age of all the professionals from different fields require different energy level. I concur with the statement and, in following paragraphs I will discuss the arguments in detail with examples. In certain occupations, employees have to put their lives in danger to complete the tasks. These jobs can execute successfully only when workers are strong both physically and mentally,

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would have ample minor diseases which could disrupt them to perform their duties. If these employees still continue their job, it would be risky for them and companies. To illustrate, due to a dearth of energy they would work gradually which affect the productivity and profit or maybe lost their lives while performing hazard mission.

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, these workers should be retired after forties and, state must bestow them pension so that they do not face any financial obstacles. There are certain types of jobs where people deserve to retire early. One of them is mine, where people have to work in mines which are more than 200 feet below the ground with extreme temperature and limited oxygen. Another occupation is service in the armed forces, where soldiers must have robust strength, mental power and deadly.

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is because many times they have to deal with extremely hazardous conditions

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as combat with enemies without having food or water for a week.

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, these workers should be retired earlier than other professionals

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as bankers. On the whole, fixing retirement age for all occupations would cause problems for employees and employers.

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, it should be flexible for certain occupations with all benefits.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

290 words

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