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Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the meantime, the revolution in technology makes a huge improvement in communication. Due to
this
 development
,
Accept space
,
 there is no need for using normal letters, as we can communicate
more conveniently
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more convenient
 and fast. I totally agree with
this
 opinion.
This
 essay will discuss my reasons in detail. I believe that modern ways of communications help us to save a lot of time, We can reach to each other faster. In the past, it
take
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took
takes
 more than one month to deliver letters between countries, but now anyone can call his friend or his family by using mobile phones. Big companies can enhance their business provided that using the internet and mobiles.
For instance
,
government
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the government
 in my
country Egypt
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country, Egypt
replace
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replaces
 the letters by emails in internal communications. So using emails and modern applications are better that the letters.
Moreover
, it helps to create new opportunities for jobs. There are young businessmen start their own business through online websites, so it has a significant impact on
countries
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country's
 revenues, as eCommerce
increase
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increases
 the wealth
for
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of
 many nations. Big companies create new departments like call
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 departments to enhance their business and hired a plethora of employees to do
this
 mission. As an example,
Amazon company
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an Amazon company
 hired more than hundred customer service agents
last
 year in Egypt. To sum up, using devices and internet better than sending letters. Most of the big companies around hired programmers to create new ways to make communications faster.
young
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
Young
 youth
understand
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understands
 the important role of technology in communication, they
do not promoted
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do not promote
 in his workplace unless he has all knowledge about modern communication.
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