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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Life
 was better when
technology
 was simpler. To what extend do you agree or disagree? It is argued that our
life
 was more fulfilling when
technology
Suggestion
the technology
 was less advanced.
However
, I
completelly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 disagree with
this
 point of view. For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to argue that
technology
 makes
life
 worse.
Firstly
, scientific breakthroughs have not only driven the development of a country in many areas, but
also
 applied to make human
life
 more and more comfortable and convenient than ever before. As we can see, incredible innovations
such
 as television have changed the way we spend leisure time.
Secondly
, smartphones nowadays could able to replace any kinds of entertainment
such
 as playing games, watching movies, listening to music. Combined
to
Suggestion
for
with
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 which allows us to access information from the other side of the world or send messages around the world by email at the touch of a button. Meanwhile, research into other aspects of information
technology
 is making it easier and cheaper for us to talk to friends and relations around the world. Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I
would argued
Suggestion
would argue
 that people today has lived in better
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
 system thanks to developments of
medicine
Suggestion
medical
technology
. There have been many remarkable advances in medicine that helped to increase our average
life
 expectancy compared to our ancestors.
Moreover
, medicine and vaccine have already discovered and used to treat infection and prevented threats of diseases. In conclusion, I totally believe that the more the
technology
 develops, the better human’s
life
 will be.
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