Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Few individuals are of the thoughts that maximum
information
should be published regarding science, business and education. While it is asserted by
rest
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the rest
of the people that some pieces of
information
are significantly precious, so it should not be accessible
freely
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freer
, I am of the opinion that each aspect of the topic has its own potential reasons which I will write in
this
essay.
To begin
with causes of why each
information
should be present in public. The
first
and foremost, it is thought that modern research and
information provoke
Accept comma addition
information, provoke
people to think innovatively and make
further
needed advancement in any particular field of work.
For instance
,
fresh and key input
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the fresh and key input
of scientific
information
can open the new avenues of operation of any inevitable diseases are possibly can help to communicate to the dwellers of any outer space planet, thereby concerns of the world population regarding scarcity of residential land can be resolved, if
such
novel contact
prove
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proves
to be successful in
end
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the end
.
Further
, presence of critical
information
can help extremely vulnerable patients to treat serious injuries or diseases and make their lives healthy.
Besides
these, major organizational issues
could be shoot
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could shoot
could be shot
,
for example
, if a company is in
delima
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a dilemma
dilemma
,
weather
introduces two alternatives
whether
any certain product should be produced and market are not, for which,
decision
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the decision
a decision
is actually depends on one very personal like or dislike. So, if any one publishes survey based
information
regarding the needs and wants of each individual, so in
this
way taking
Accept comma addition
way, taking
such
input any business can launch its product and could earn
massive profit
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massive profits
a massive profit
.
However
, here are the logical reasons why not to broadcast pivotal
information
.
First
, possibly each one could misuse confidential
information
, like anyone can produce toxic virus or any electronic equipment to murder his own desired target. Here is a realistic illustration of it,
couple
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a couple
of years before America knowingly generated nasty virus to affect
newly emerging Chinese economy
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the newly emerging Chinese economy
and it got so
well
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good
that it heavily
possed
arranged for pictorial purposes
posed
post
problems
to
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with
them and Chinese fell near to bottom of development.
Moreover
, sophisticated
information
about businesses can harm them badly.
Such
as, secret and unique production process of any product
get
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gets
leaked, resultantly obvious one’s business will get flopped. To conclude, I am of the opinion that both sides of
this
scenario carries
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scenario, carry
scenario carry
it’s
on
belonging to or on behalf of a specified person (especially yourself); preceded by a possessive
own
massive advantageous reasons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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