Nowadays parents put too much of pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development? Give your explanation using some relevant examples from your experience. Write your response not less than 250 words. You get 40 minutes to complete this task.

In
this
technology
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technological
world, there is a pressure
being built
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been built
by the family members of the students, that
success
is the most vital factor to lead a better life. In my
opinion
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opinion, this
this
is preposterous and parents should understand the passion of the student
instead
of running for
success
. In todays world parents are compelling the children to a
stressfull
extremely irritating to the nerves
stressful
environment towards studies.Let me explain in detail. The problem starts with comparison with other students and their educational standards. Children in todays society are clear in vision, of what exactly they want to do. Parents with ideas,
inconcern
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in concern
with the family members or friends, want to implement the same to children, putting them under psychological impacts.
For example
; we all know the famous
circketer
an athlete who plays cricket
cricketer
Sachin Tendulkar who had given his best performance in the field of Cricket and stood as a role model for many youngsters.But the educational profile of Sachin, is
on
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in
a moderate way since from childhood. His parents had never felt bad about him and encouraged to pursue career in the field of cricket which he admires a lot. The career of Sachin in cricket history
,
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,
never felt his
parents
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parents'
decision was wrong. Another famous personality Mr. Dheeru Bhai Ambani started his business with a retail clothing shop, developed as one of the richest
person
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people
persons
in todays world. He had completed schooling education only; passion towards business drives him to think innovative ideas in a strategic approach. The ideas of him make every attempt
success
followed by a good leadership qualities.
Therefore I
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Therefore, I
want to conclude, there is no point in brainstorming the children with
parents
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parents'
views, rather than spending time with them, observing the interests and
guidence
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
guidance
to the path they want to become, is the key to
success
for any student.
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