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It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree? Why or why not?

#money #friend #harm #damage #friendship
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Now, in our modern world, some kind of relationship is broken only a reason for borrowing
money
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.
it
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It
 is my personal
opinion if
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opinion, if
 you
borrowing
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are borrowing
borrow
money
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 from your
friend
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 and never
return
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 it so in that case it harms your
friendship
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.
on
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On
 the other side if you
return
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 it
on
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at
 the
time
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 it
can not
can not
cannot
 harm your
friendship
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.
now
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Now
 I discuss both of view and support my answer.
Firstly
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, talk about the bright side, I think that borrowing
money
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 from a person who is close to you is normal.
imagine
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Imagine
 that someone could need to help and no doubt that his or her
friend
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 offer to help.
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for
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For
 example, a couple of weeks ago, my best
friend
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 need some
money
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 so he contacted me and told me that, please gave me some
money
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. I was fully sure that he never betray with me.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 I gave him
money
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after
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After
 some
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time which
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time, which
time
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 he told me he
come
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is coming
 and
return
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 my
money
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.
my
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My
this
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 storey purpose is if you
return
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borrowing
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borrowed
money
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 it never harm your
friendship
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. On the dark side, if you
borrowing
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are borrowing
borrow
money
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 from a person and never
return
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, it would harm your
friendship
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.
someday
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Someday
ago my
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ago, my
friend
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 borrowed
money
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 from me. I was not sure about him, but he requested to me
to he needs
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he needs money
money
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 for some important reason. So I believed and gave
money
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.
after
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After
 that when I call him, he never picked up my phone or never replied to my messages.
in
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In
 that case he avoided me and never contacted me to
return
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 my
money
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 in that
time
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 it
had harming
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has harmed
 our
friendship
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. To sum up, I think that borrowing
money
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 and returning at that
time
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, it will help to keep your
friendship
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 stronger and never cut the
relationshp
a relation between people; ('relationship' is often used where 'relation' would serve, as in 'the relationship between inflation and unemployment', but the preferred usage of 'relationship' is for human relations or states of relatedness)
relationship
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