Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The severity
of penalties
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has been
a highly discussed topic since centuries. It is thought by many people that criminals done
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the same actions
should be punished equally without taking into consideration their motives or other relative circumstances.
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, it is suggested by the others that the motive behind each individual carrying out wrongful action, their situation and condition should be considered when giving punishment. In my opinion, even though fixed penalties may seem to have contributed to the encouragement of
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, regarding each individual's own condition when punishing the unlawful behaviour provides more just environment. Supporters of fixed penalties argue that in order to promote
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among wrongdoers there is a need to charge each of them by the same punishment. The judges might act
arbitrarly
in a random manner
arbitrarily
arbitrary
and sometimes defectively when making a decision.
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happens when rulers give much more importance to their feelings than the existing fact.
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, there is a limited knowledge regarding the problem encountered.
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is merely aware of the information which has shown them
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may lead to false judgement and
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inaccurate penalties.
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decisions may be appealed by the other party and
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higher
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reverses that judgement. Take,
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year in Russia.
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, the
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and the justice are not always overlap, the latter is a far wider and complex term. Every criminal has
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different motivations
a different motivation
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criminal
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, treating them equally would contribute to the disruption of our morality and understanding of
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by culminating in unfairness.
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, a child who stole some milk from the supermarket and the person who steals some perfume or clothes should be punished
distictively
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, even the acts have the same name as theft from the perspective of law.
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, the society would be
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affected
poorly. In conclusion, despite the possibility of the
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necessity
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the necessity
to prohibit those unfair conclusions, I believe that flexible and variable decisions better serve for justice and the existing moral values in a society.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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