Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is often said that

music

has a magical power to connect and unite people without any cultural backgrounds or generation barriers. I disagree with

this

and will demonstrate my opinion with two reasons: culture and age have a great influence on how people perceive it and the impact of

music

on the cohesion between the fan groups of different musical genres. Audiences who do not come from one’s country or the same generation will be interested in other kinds of

music

because nationality affects its citizens which makes them familiar with some types of

music

rather than others. Old and young people are

also

affected by life’s experiences or lifestyle.

For instance

, Indian

music

which has a long story and many illogical episodes or the

music

came from the US with so many noisy sounds, up and down, both of them were hated by me - a Vietnamese. The group, whose love with one musical genre will be isolated from another.

Music

fans just enjoy their

music

line, feel happy and relaxed when listening to that kind of

music

like country

music

fans, they are unfamiliar with rock

music

, noise

music

instruments or beat too fast.

For example

, I fall in love with country

music

and enjoy bolero, but I have to listen to nursery rhymes which my nephew prefers because taking care of him when his parents got out is my responsibility. It makes me tired and stressed, so I do not want to be beside him anymore, each time. In conclusion, I believe that

music

is powerful and magical in connecting people, but depending on their

music

style.

Tue Apr 14 2020

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

271 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal language
evoke
connect
diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
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Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Many elderly people are no long looked after by their families but put are in nurse homes or care homes. What are the advantages or disadvantages of this trend?