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Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a venue propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.

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Dear Mr. Sharma I am writing
this
 letter to ask a few questions about throwing a party for our co-workers. I have been working around the clock to find a suitable time for our party. I picked the 15th Of May 2024 for that event and the day Is Sunday, as we all are free and happy to join the celebration.
Moreover
, I was thinking about a venue for
this
 event.
Initially
, I decided that we should through a party at a community hall,
however
, when I enquired about the availability of that, they told me It was full on that day.
Therefore
, I want to suggest you another venue and It's a banquet hall which Is located In the central part of the city.
Furthermore
, I would like to suggest some food and beverage options for our event. The first and foremost thing Is to serve vegetarian food as all our co-workers are following a vegetarian diet. After that, we should arrange alcohol and soft drinks as beverages Ex. Pepsi, Fanta etc. I look forward to receiving your reply and suggestions for
this
 social gathering. Yours Sincerely Biren Patel
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cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly addresses a single point or aspect of the instructions, with appropriate transitions between them.
coherence
Be concise with dates and days to avoid any potential confusion (e.g., 'I suggest the 15th of May, which is a Sunday').
task
Double-check for minor grammatical errors and ensure consistent and correct usage of capitalization throughout.
tone
Polite and respectful tone is maintained throughout the letter.
content
Most of the required points are addressed, showing an understanding of the task requirements.
structure
Clear greeting and closing, providing a professional structure to the letter.
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