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The widespread use of Internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of Internet? What solutions can you suggest?

#internet
In the high-tech world, with the invention of the Internet, people have a chance to access with incredible things as never before. They can work or interact with their partners overseas without flying to meet each other.
However
, many negative aspects relating to the overuse of the Internet
such
 as
health problem
Suggestion
health problems
a health problem
, black
web
 and privacy gradually emerge. While using the
web
 may have 3 serious drawbacks, there are certain solutions for the Internet users. It is undeniable that health problem is the
first
 alarming problem relating to the widespread use of the Internet. Nowadays, that people are becoming more addicted to the Internet on the screen of devices
such
 as smart-phone, laptop, iPod and so on brings people many serious health-related problems
such
 as eyes disease or depression.
Furthermore
, so dangerous is the Internet that
the young
Suggestion
younger
the younger
 generations may access to
black
a solid piece of something (usually having flat rectangular sides)
block
web
 containing violence or bully which negatively affects the growth of them.
Besides
, privacy is an inevitable issue when using the Internet because our personal information is
on
Suggestion
in
vulnerable position
Suggestion
a vulnerable position
 due to our dependency on the Internet.
Nevertheless
, it is thought that there are many possible solutions for the users. On account of the fact that
young generation
Suggestion
the young generation
 is more dependent on the Internet than the older generation, creating many outdoor activities and monitoring the use of the Internet in both schools and workplaces are needed ways to decrease the amount of time spent on the Internet.
In addition
, the government should establish many rules to tackle with the black
web
 and the hackers to protect the users from being gained personal information
such
 as
password
Suggestion
passwords
a password
 or credit card number. In brief, in spite of our increasingly
dependency
Suggestion
dependent
depend
 on the Internet bringing us many harmful issues, we should take many solutions into account to use
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
 wisely.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • instantaneous communication
  • social media platforms
  • virtual meetings
  • e-commerce
  • global marketplaces
  • streaming services
  • online gaming
  • content creation
  • remote working
  • cyberbullying
  • internet addiction
  • access to information
  • professional development
  • privacy concerns
  • educational resources
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