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Some people view teenager conflicts with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whist others see it something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that as the children grow, they have more disputes with their parents. While, some part of society believes these conflicts to be dangerous,
however
, I ponder that certain clashes are important, so that children can present their viewpoint too.
To begin
 with, the reason why people think
such
 incompatibilities to be a problem is that these disparities build not only a conversation gap, but trust issues
also
.
For instance
, scolding and punishing a child for his choice of cloth, friends, and some habits, may result in a situation, where youngsters would prefer to hide the things that parents need to know, which may lead the path towards the danger.
In contrast
, if parents calmly observe the deeds and presents a logical explanation of those issues while discussing with their children, considering the adolescent's point as well,
then
 the results could be better. On the flip side, I think there are myriad advantages of these conversations:
firstly
, the juvenile develops his logical thinking, look about the odds and even, before forming an opinion. To exemplify, a toddler may thoroughly refuse to follow the religious myth being followed by his family, either by doing research or by actively thinking.
Secondly
,
such
 children may not hesitate to raise their voice against any type of violence in the future.
Finally
, they have a better future and are more mature in comparison to other children of their age, as they are parented in a way in which they analyse before reacting. In conclusion, I wrap it all by saying,
although
 there is a minute risk of loosing connection with the offspring in the arguments, but if they are allowed to think and form their own views,
then
 it could bring good results.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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