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some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today's society. To what extent do you agree with this view.

#methods #society
In
this
 digital age, many of the marketing methods and techniques utilize in commercials are and immoral and inappropriate. I totally agree with
this
 statement and that because advertisers mislead information and claims to promote them assets and
also
 exploit children to force parent buy their items.
Firstly
, the manipulation of the audience by providing false claims so as to gain a huge chunk of the market. Through the promotion of products as health-giving, in spite of, that them consumption may generate some serious health concerns in the future.
Thus
, to make them claims supportive the advertiser may call out doctors or provide independent company research as an irrefutable evidence.
For instance
, I use to take energy boosting product “X-energy” for a long period which
consequently
 generate me dangerous allergic reactions.
Secondly
, advertising company makes heavy use of "pester power" as it is more effective than targeting parents directly. Indeed, commercials affect children’s attempts to influence parents, so as much as children keep pressing their parent on the company got its product bought.
For example
, I remember when my nephew was 9 years old, he cried and work his mother on to buy him the “play station”.
ho
wever,
Suggestion
However
she could not afford it, she borrowed money to satisfy his desire and bought him the “ PlayStation”. To conclude, methods and techniques of the commercial companies are manipulative and misleading and could
also
 use children to touch parent emotion for promoting them as sets.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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