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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a speacial occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter ⁃Give details of your visit to the restaurant ⁃Expain the reason for the celebration ⁃Say what was good about the food and the service

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Dear Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well !
Last
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 week, on 15th April, I
along with
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 my some friends visited your restaurant - "Shina" at the Delhi location. It was our first visit and surprisingly it turned out to be great on account of various reasons especially the food served in your kitchen was the cherry on the cake. That day was already special for us as one of our friends got selected as an IAS officer. To celebrate
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, we decided to visit and have a treat in your dine-in place. I would like to appreciate the ambience of your Dine in Place especially slow music in the background provides perfect
surrounding
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 for people who just want to sit and relax. Alongside
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,
Asian
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the Asian
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 cuisine served was delicious. I am a coffee lover and generally prefer to have decaf from reputed coffee shops.
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, you changed my mind and the coffee served was
of
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top-notch. All of the above, the service provided and
staff's
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the staff's
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 nature is remarkable. Thank you for a wonderful experience. I would love to visit again !

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coherence and cohesion
Consider providing a clearer division of ideas per paragraph to improve focus on each point.
task response
Try to include more specific details about the food and service to enhance the completeness of your response.
task response
The tone of the letter is warm and appreciative, which is suitable for the occasion.
coherence and cohesion
The letter effectively conveys the reason for the visit and the overall positive experience.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • celebration
  • atmosphere
  • ambiance
  • appetizers
  • main course
  • desserts
  • standout
  • flavors
  • presentation
  • attentiveness
  • friendliness
  • efficiency
  • memorable
  • gratitude
  • complimentary
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