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Some people think that the best way to solve the problem of poverty in many countries is to set up businesses and improve trade links with rich countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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To numerous individuals, to decrease destitution in certain nations, they need to start organizations and make exchange associations with rich countries. Actually, I concur with
this
 announcement because of various advantages from along these lines. Plus, different measures ought to be thought about. At
first
, while helping out rich nations in exchanging, their items, scenes, customs and culture will be presented progressively through gatherings and meetings.
Subsequently
, more individuals will think about their nations and presumably visit for their wonderful spots and milestones in their old
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
.
Additionally
, it will be simpler for them to make a decent connection with others, and different nations will help them by giving cash or preparing their understudies for nothing.
For instance
, before, due to the closeness among Vietnam and Cuba, Cubans were happy to supply weapons for Vietnamese to be against the foes. On account of them, the Vietnamese could shield their territory from adversaries and build up the nation.
However
, a few systems must be considered to build up the poor nations. To start with, governments should concentrate on instruction's quality more. Since understudies profit by present day showing techniques and offices, they will increase enough information and abilities to add to the steady
increment
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incremental
 in
economy
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the economy
 and different fields later on.
Second
, they need to attempt to tackle some major issues in their nations, particularly the horror rate by forcing stricter laws, with the goal that the nations will be
eminent
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eminently
 as the most secure spots to travel. In
this
 way, the travel industry will rise. At long
last
, burning through cash on the qualities would be perfect for the inhabitants
to do
Suggestion
do
.
For example
, on the off chance that their nation has numerous oceans, at that point they ought to successfully misuse the fish assets there. In conclusion, I suppose that organizations coordination with rich country, alongside different measures, will melt away the neediness of one nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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