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The internet provides us with info about life and cultures of different countries and some say it is not necessary to visit them to learn about them. Agree or disagree?

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Some people believe due to the existence of the
internet
 which provides access to all the
information
 a person's may need, there is no need to travel to other parts of the
world
 in order to get to know their culture and the way they live. I completely disagree with the mentioned idea since the experience gained on a
trip
 cannot be available in any other means.
Although
, some who could not have the chance to see other places can get
information
 about different places through the
internet
. From some people point of view, it is not imperative to travel to see what is happening in other places and how life goes there.
This
 idea is more supportable for people who have limited budget for leisure time. Some cannot afford a
trip
 at all while some people have the privilege to be in some parts of the
world though
Accept comma addition
world, though
 they possibly miss some parts of the globe so that investigating through the
internet
 remains the main source of
information
besides
 travel guide books.
On the other hand
, the way we feel and experience living in other parts of the
world
 through short or prolonged trips is extremely different from just seeing the pictures and watching documentaries about city lives in other parts of the globe. Travel can be arranged even with the short amount of money if the plan sets wisely.
Additionally
, our mind is going to be refreshed thoroughly after being away from our routine life. To sum up, the
internet
 has provided a huge amount of
information
 regarding various places in the
world
. Some believe there is no need to go on a
trip
 to get familiar with the culture of the places which cannot be shared by any who insist on the effects of a short or long
trip
 on our daily life e.g. Refreshing our mind which I follow the same.

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