You recently made a journey by train. When you got on the train, you realised you had left a bag on the platform. Write a letter to the station manager. In your letter: • give details of where and when you left the bag • describe the bag and its contents • suggest how you could get the bag back
Dear Sir or Madam,
Recently, I left my bag on the 5th platform on your station. Right now I’m on the way to Zurich. I forgot it exactly on the cafeteria’s right corner bench where the 5th platform begins.
This
duffle bag is black and white, and it’s printed all over with Nike logos on the central pockets and the back side of it, where there is a special section for water bottles. Inside it, I had my family's passports, a large amount of money, some clothes, and the keys to the apartment we rented for our trip.
My question is, could you send there some guards or working stuff so they can see if the bag is still there? If it’s not there, could you please look through the video cameras and see what happened there and send me a video of it, Linking Words
then
till I return it would be great if you would alert the police that was stolen an important item.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Julius CaesarLinking Words
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Task Achievement
Consider elaborating on how you can claim the bag once it is found to make the response more complete.
Task Achievement
Make sure to clarify roles, such as 'station staff' instead of 'working stuff,' for greater precision.
Coherence and Cohesion
Add transitional phrases to enhance logical flow between paragraphs, such as 'In addition' or 'Furthermore.'
Task Achievement
The details about the bag and its contents are clear and quite vivid.
Coherence and Cohesion
The closing ('Yours faithfully') is formal and appropriate for the context.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a logical paragraph structure, addressing each point of the task effectively.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite