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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems.

#diet #meat #health
Eating meat can cause serious
health
 problems, I agree with that idea. In my opinion people should a vegetarian
diet
 2 to 3 times a week. There are some reasons why people should take a vegetarian
diet
.
Firstly
, eating a lot of meat is gain weight, that means if people only eat meat in their everyday
life
 they become fat
fastly
with rapid movements
quickly
. Becoming fat is bad for their
health
 and slow down their
life
 activities. Losing their
life
 activities are bad for
career
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the career
a career
, and becoming not wanting to do anything.
Secondly
, if their
health
 will
deteriorate they
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deteriorate as they
 suffer
for
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from
 financial. Financial problems are
hard
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the hardest
 thing for who is not rich. If poor person’s
health
deteriorate
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deteriorates
, it is very difficult to decide. To sum up, keeping a vegetarian
diet
 is good for your
health
 and your looks. When keep a
diet
 your hair, skin, and face are
looks
Suggestion
looking
 shiny and healthy. So everyone should keep a vegetarian
diet
 in their
life
.

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