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Some people think an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
air
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pollution
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 has become a major issue all around the world. Some people think that the main reason of
air
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pollution
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 is
most usage
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more usage
 of cars. So one
day
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 should be
international car free
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an international car free day, which
an international car free day which
the international car free day which
day
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 which is
most effective method
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the most effective method
 to reduce
air
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pollution but
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pollution, but
 others believe that there are more others ways to reduce it.
This
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 essay looks into both views with personal opinion.
To begin
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, some mortals think that an international car-free
day
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 is an effective method to reduce
air
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pollution
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 because nowadays more than half percentage of
public
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the public
 are using the private vehicles which
emmit
expel (gases or odors)
emit
 the
fatel
bringing death
fatal
 gases in the
air
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. These gases are very dangerous for human health.
For example
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, in Delhi city where roads are very congested due to driving the cars effect to the environment. For
this
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, in that city, the temperature is always high and there is no fresh or clean
air
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 to breath. If one
day
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 will be free from cars, there could be
keep
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kept
air
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 fresh to some extent. On the other side, others people think that
air
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pollution
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 could be reduced by using the others effective methods.
For Instance
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, people use
air
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 conditioner which
also
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 effect to the
air
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.
As a result
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, there can be seen unbalance in
outskirts
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the outskirts
 like
reduce
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to reduce
reducing
 the rain. So, these constructions should be so far away from human
habitant
the type of environment in which an organism or group normally lives or occurs
habitat
. I believe that, only one
day
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 banned the usage of cars not solution for reducing the
air
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pollution
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. To sum up,
although
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 excessive usage of cars
are
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is
 responsible for
air
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pollution
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, but we
can not
can not
cannot
 ignore the other factors which pollute to the
air
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 like industries, factories. So government should make rules and regulations to control the threats which effect to human life.
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