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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is most important thing to succeed in life?

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These days academic proficiency, considered by the many, acts as an effective tool to attain
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 of a person.
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, there is little doubt that
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the existence
 of the real heroes in many industries with low level education has already proved the fact that theoretical knowledge is only a part and parcel of
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 achievements not the sole one. In
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 context, it becomes ever so pertinent to discuss the cause that lie behind the proliferation of
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 phenomenon and the imperative requirements that undeniably lead to the prosperity of an individual. The major force at play
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here, which
 causes and accentuates more
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 rate of people with less academic qualifications is nothing but the exposure rate of
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 community to the social
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 than normal school going children. Generally, the old fashioned and outdated educational strategies which is most likely prepared for the industrial jobs hardly assist children so as to solve practical, real
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 problems. Students who fail in school curriculum,
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, acquire certain
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 skills like problem-solving, leadership, good communication and so on, and with which they achieve personal as well as professional
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. There are many students with innate ability in extracurricular activities most probably quit their academic
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 and follow their passions and retain
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 rate in
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 all because of the boring schooling that only follows factual curriculum.
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, there are many research studies have already
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 in front line to notify the authorities regarding the positive correlation between economic independence and dedication, hard work and perseverance. To attain
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 ahead, one has to realise or rectify his or her potentials as those are the extremely powerful tool in
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 Competitive world.
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 can be done only by letting a child into the social
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 under good supervision of either the parents or the teachers. Sachin Tendulkar, a renowned cricket player, has succeeded his career through complete focus and determination on the goal, and of course stands as a testimony here that symbolises non academic requirements and diligent efforts are pivotal behind being successful. To conclude, I reiterate the fact that academic qualification will certainly improve a person’s
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chance
 of achieving
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 but it is not a pre-requisite. In fact,
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 is actually a byproduct of hard work and perseverance

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