some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams such as football. other people think that taking part in individual sports is better, like swimming or running. discuss both views and give your own opinion

It is considered by many people that participating in sports which are played in teams

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as football is more advantageous for players than who play by themselves. Other people prefer to take part in individual sports like swimming or running. While I understand that playing individual sports makes

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a substantial contribution

in boosting up the independence, in my perspective,

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sports are a smarter choice because not only do they advance

paticipants’

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discipline

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but

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create more motivation.

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with, individual sports are really helpful to make players more independent because they have no one to rely on. Their success entirely depends on their own efforts, just the athletes himself

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carry

carries

are carrying

him though the competition.

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, my little brother

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played

tennis for 2 years, and he makes everyone

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taken unawares or suddenly and feeling wonder or astonishment

surprised

by showing his independence from

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an

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a

young age of seven. He loves tennis so much that he goes to the tennis court himself and he always try his best to be stronger day by day. My parents believe that he becomes more and more self-reliant thanks to playing tennis.

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, it is undeniable that playing sports in

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improve the

discipline

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and create more training motivation for players.

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people tend to relax and be easy on themselves when practicing on their own, as a

team

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member, he/she is usually more responsible to not affect the other teammates. Take myself as an example, I am taking part in both basketball and running. I always attend basketball practice on

time regardless

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time, regardless

of bad weather, but I easily reschedule my running session when it rains. My story clearly illustrates that

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sports are better than individual one in term of their incentive and

discipline

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to players. In conclusion, there is no doubt that both individual and

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sports are good for

paticipants but

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participants, but

participants but

I prefer

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sports than individual sports because of the outstanding benefits they provide

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as

discipline

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and motivation.