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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing, and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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The graph below shows the quantities of goods
transport
 in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of
transport
. The line chart illustrates the number of products shipped in the Unit Kingdom by four various types of transportation, namely road,
water
, railway and pipeline from 1974 to 2002. Overall, it is clear that all types of
transport
 experienced an upward trend, in which the road always was a mode of
transport
 which people used the most, following that were the
water
, railway and the least was the pipeline. There was a slight increase in the number of transports by the road from 70
million
 tonnes in 1974 to 82
million
 tonnes in 1990,
then
 it continued to rise gradually to 97
million
 tonnes in 2002. At the beginning, the amount of shipping the pipeline was at 4
million
 tonnes, by 1994, it grew moderately to 22
million
 tonnes and by 2002,
this
 figure still did not change. In 1978, the amount of goods transporting by the rail line and
water
 was the same at 40
million
 tonnes. There was a fluctuation in the number of transporting by the railway, while the amount of shipping by the
water
 climbed slowly to 68
million
 tonnes in 2002.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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