Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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It is believed that spending governmental money on
arts
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the arts
is useless as it could be spent on others country’s issues. I disagree
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with
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statement due to the fact that
art
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plays a key role in the society, culture and
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moreover in
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moreover, in
international tourism worldwide and I will explain the main concepts of
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vision. Since the
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development of humanity,
art
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has been vital, in fact the
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trace of human presence was discovered by some paintings in many caves in Europe. Through
art
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, we can understand and study the development of humanity since their origins to nowadays. There are several national museums of international importance which preserve these importance testimonies of history and human vision of the world,
furthermore
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also
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architectural buildings that have been declared
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the hierarchy
of
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by
UNESCO. Tourists came from all over the world to see these
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art
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artistic
representations and to illustrate
one
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, the Louvre Museum is
one
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the main attraction of France.
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,
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is
one
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of the main reasons of tourism all over the world: Italy, as well as other European countries are clear examples.
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, I believe that governmental funds cannot respond to many issues of the society. Many people suffer from poverty and there is no guarantee of a good quality life. I believe that our countries should focus their efforts and resources by providing
them basic needs
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them with basic needs
.
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, by thinking that
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is
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of the main income of a country, it can be helpful to provide
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this requirements
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these requirements
this requirement
to national inhabitants. To conclude, I believe that invert at national level in
art
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benefits both residents and tourists at international level because it meets both needs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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