The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? Do you think this is the best way to deal with the problem? What other solutions can you suggest?
Obesity in
lad's
has become one of the major problems in current generations,which leads to serious health issues.Change the noun form
lads
lad
The
significant amount of people think Correct article usage
A
this
can be resolved by spending ample
amount of time Correct article usage
an ample
for
sports and exercise wheel Others opine there are alternatives to Change preposition
on
this
. To embark on,the predominant factor that leads to increase
Correct article usage
an increase
of
weight in Adolescents Change preposition
in
are
laziness, which is Correct subject-verb agreement
is
due to
the rapid growth of technology where people prefer to engage online instead
of getting out of home and involving
in some physical activities, Wrong verb form
getting involved
additionally
people prefer easy
approach for all the things Correct article usage
an easy
for instance
, ordering food online instead
of cooking at home.This
approach does not move them from their seats, consequently
an abnormal increase in the
weight at early ages. Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, this
problem can be resolved by spending some time every Day
with physical activities Fix capitalization
day
such
as games and Exercises which could bring a drastic Change
in one's health, Fix capitalization
change
in addition
to this
activity for example
, jogging and Cycling would be a better option for the lad's who prefer to workout outside the School. In most of the educational institutions
a specific slot would be allocated For recreational activities, proper usage of these classes would bring a broader View in children on the health impacts of over heft. Add a comma
institutions,
To conclude
, over
substance is a problem that one has to take Change preposition
apply
serious
at Change the adjective
seriously
the
early age , which can be resolved by investing some amount of time Correct article usage
an
on
sports and daily exercises as prevention is better than cure , each individual has to be serious in preventing the Change preposition
in
over weight
Correct your spelling
overweight
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