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The line graph illustrates the number of magazine sales by a publisher in 4 European countries between 1999 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the number of magazine sales by a publisher in 4 European countries between 1999 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the magazine
sales
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 by a single publisher in four
countries
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 in Europe (France, Holland, Belgium and Germany) from 1999 to 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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two
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the two
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countries
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 increased and the others were not positively changed. A glance at the graph reveals that magazine
sales
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 in Belgium marginally increased in the first year, from just around 1.8
million
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euros
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 to 2
million
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euros
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,
then
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 rose dramatically in the remaining
period
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 to reach a peak of 5
million
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euros
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.
Sales
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 in France
also
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 experienced a positive change but it was just a slight increase over the
period
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. They started the
period
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 just above 4
million
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euros
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 and reached the same rate as Belgium
at the end
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 of the
period
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.
In contrast
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, the other two
countries
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 did not
experienced
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 improvement
on
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in
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 magazine
sales
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.
Sales
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 in Germany significantly decrease over a
period
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. They started as the highest among
four
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the four
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countries
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 at around 4.5
million
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euros
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 but finished as the lowest at approximately 2.5
million
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euros
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. Interestingly,
sales
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 in Holland remain unchanged over four years, even though there was a slight rise in the first year, from 3
miilion
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million
euros
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 to around 3.2
million
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euros
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, it slipped back towards the end of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, countries, million, euros, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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